firstly
about the music: It's pretty good, not very special, sometimes it feels the voice sample is just a little of track, specially in the middle of the song. The horns are nice though! The bass can be a little louder for my taste.
Secondly about your text: It's cool you "made" it and stuff... but this isn't a site for showing off your skillz... There are other far better sites to do such things! This is more like a fun way to show your songs to the crowd... And it's nice to hear what people think about your songs... But I don't really like it how you position yourself above everybody else on this site...
Well thats what I got to say!
Cheerio!!